#512: Versers Work

This is mark Joseph “young” blog entry #512, on the subject of Versers Work.

With permission of Valdron Inc I have previously completed publishing my first ten Multiverser novels,

  1. Verse Three, Chapter One:  The First Multiverser Novel,
  2. Old Verses New,
  3. For Better or Verse,
  4. Spy Verses,
  5. Garden of Versers,
  6. Versers Versus Versers,
  7. Re Verse All,
  8. In Verse Proportion,
  9. Con Verse Lea, and
  10. In Version, in collaboration with Eric R. Ashley,

in serialized form on the web (those links will take you to the table of contents for each book).  Along with each book there was also a series of web log posts looking at the writing process, the decisions and choices that delivered the final product; those posts are indexed with the chapters in the tables of contents pages.  Now as I am posting the eleventh, Con Version,  again written in collaboration with Eric R. Ashley, I am again offering a set of “behind the writings” insights.  This “behind the writings” look may contain spoilers because it sometimes talks about my expectations for the futures of the characters and stories–although it sometimes raises ideas that were never pursued, as being written partially concurrently with the story it sometimes discusses where I thought it was headed.  You might want to read the referenced chapters before reading this look at them.  Links below (the section headings) will take you to the specific individual chapters being discussed, and there are (or will soon be) links on those pages to bring you back hopefully to the same point here.

This is the tenth post for this novel, covering chapters 109 through 120.  Previous mark Joseph “young” behind-the-writings web log posts for this book include:

  1. #498:  Characters Restart covering chapters 1 through 12;
  2. #501:  Characters Orienting, covering chapters 13 through 24;
  3. #502:  Verser Setbacks, chapters 25 through 36;
  4. #503:  Versers Progress, chapters 37 through 48;
  5. #505:  Versers Advance, chapters 49 through 60;
  6. #506:  Characters Involved, chapters 61 through 72;
  7. #509:  Character Challenges, chapters 73 through 84;
  8. #510:  Versers Debate, chapters 85 through 96; and
  9. #511:  Characters Change, chapters 87 through 108.

There is also a section of the site, Multiverser Novel Support Pages, in which I have begun to place materials related to the novels beginning with character papers for the major characters, giving them at different stages as they move through the books.  This is also the longest book to date, and has quite a few long chapters in it, so there will be quite a few of these background articles.

History of the series, including the reason it started, the origins of character names and details, and many of the ideas, are in earlier posts, and won’t be repeated here.

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Quick links to discussions in this page:
Chapter 109 Cooper 35
Chapter 110 Takano 118
Chapter 111 Brown 322
Chapter 112, Cooper 36
Chapter 113, Takano 119
Chapter 114, Brown 323
Chapter 115, Cooper 37
Chapter 116, Takano 120
Chapter 117, Brown 324
Chapter 118, Cooper 38
Chapter 119, Takano 121
Chapter 120, Brown 325

Chapter 109, Cooper 35

I decided it was time to go back to alternating the three characters, so I started with Cooper heading back toward Tommy, and then inserted the Takano chapter after it.

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Chapter 110, Takano 118

I flowed from Cooper 35 into this, but got confused in the middle of it, shifting to his perspective, and had to go back and rewrite it to keep it with her.

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Chapter 111, Brown 322

Eric drafted this, taking Derek to another predominantly segregated church, where the segregation makes sense because most of the congregants speak Chinese and are trying to learn English.

After what was to have been the final edit, as I was setting up Derek’s character paper, I realized that we had confused Mandarin and Cantonese–Mandarin is the dialect Derek had learned as a spy, and Cantonese the one he was only now starting to learn.  I had to come back and make a few changes to this chapter to clarify that.

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Chapter 112, Cooper 36

I drafted this after finishing Takano 118, because I wanted to get in the conversation about computers and the suggestion that both Cooper and Tommy could possibly get jobs in the industry.

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Chapter 113, Takano 119

In Eric’s original draft Tommy went shopping but bought things she already had.  I pointed this out, so Eric rewrote it as a trip to the laundromat.

Eric put Tommy in a dark blue calf-length skirt, but I shortened it, thinking that the skirts worn by teens in the 1950s were knee-length.

Eric had ended this with Tommy taking a long bath, but wanting to accelerate events in their secret identity lives I had inadvertently continued with Cooper taking her to meet Keller, so Eric came back and backwrote this to fit that.

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Chapter 114, Brown 323

On a readthrough following my hospitalization I spotted the fact that Pierre Hunter had given Derek a “ring of keys”, and realized that at this point he could only really account for the front door and maybe the back door.  Between us we had dismissed the notion that there would be a gunlock on the shotgun, and decided that one of the keys opened a cabinet somewhere in the house that they had not yet found.  We discussed what might be in it, and since I proposed that it would contain information about the monsters, I ultimately drafted this.  I thought there should be “several” folders, but couldn’t figure out what they would cover besides the three monsters Eric had uncovered in his research, so I stuck to three.

Eric’s research gave him this:  “locals believe that the city is actually the home of real vampires.  During the 1930s, brothers John and Wayne Carter were executed for committing multiple murders.  About a dozen bodies, drained of their blood, were discovered after a bloodied young woman managed to escape from their apartment.  Sightings of the brothers are often reported to this very day, as their bodies mysteriously vanished from the family’s funeral vault.”  We pushed them back a few decades, and discussed them in some detail.

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Chapter 115, Cooper 37

I drafted this, but before I had finished Eric pointed out that the previous Takano chapter had her returning from the laundromat in different clothes and immediately taking a bath.  Because it seemed important to streamline getting them working, we agreed to backwrite the previous material to fit with this.

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Chapter 116, Takano 120

Eric drafted this, introducing the idea that Brian and Tommy were sort of “rubberstamped” into their jobs.  He also came up with Janus Cutter as the name for Doctor Mordenslice’ secret identity.

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Chapter 117, Brown 324

We discussed the design of these particular vampires, agreeing that they would be similar to but distinct from those in Lauren’s early stories.  I pieced together some of what we had agreed on into Hunter’s file.  We wanted there to be some sort of cryptic clue to the location of the graves, but all I could think of at the time was that they weren’t on holy ground so they could have been in a Cajun graveyard outside the city.  I also added the notion that they were often active around Mardi Gras, as that was our next confrontation.

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Chapter 118, Cooper 38

I was jotting down notes on this, and decided to go ahead and write it.  The name Granville and some of the characteristics came from a veterinarian character in the original BBC television production of All Creatures Great and Small.  I was going to cut it shorter, but decided to finish the meeting and then figure out what Tommy does next.

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Chapter 119, Takano 121

I did this wrap-up of the day largely to get back to Derek and Brian, but thought that a bit of the lot of girls in the workplace ought to be considered.  My plan includes that at some point she’s going to show her worth to the engineers, but not quite yet.

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Chapter 120, Brown 325

I suggested that having been to a few Catholic services I should write the chapter in which Derek goes to church with Pierre, and Eric agreed that his own experience, limited to a couple weddings and a funeral, would be inadequate.

Realizing that there was separatism in the Catholic church that didn’t exist in the individual Protestant churches, I brought that forward into the theme.

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This has been the tenth behind-the-writings look at Con Version.  If there is interest and continued support from readers we will endeavor to continue with more behind-the-writings posts and another novel.

#511: Characters Change

This is mark Joseph “young” blog entry #511, on the subject of Characters Change.

With permission of Valdron Inc I have previously completed publishing my first ten Multiverser novels,

  1. Verse Three, Chapter One:  The First Multiverser Novel,
  2. Old Verses New,
  3. For Better or Verse,
  4. Spy Verses,
  5. Garden of Versers,
  6. Versers Versus Versers,
  7. Re Verse All,
  8. In Verse Proportion,
  9. Con Verse Lea, and
  10. In Version, in collaboration with Eric R. Ashley,

2 in serialized form on the web (those links will take you to the table of contents for each book).  Along with each book there was also a series of web log posts looking at the writing process, the decisions and choices that delivered the final product; those posts are indexed with the chapters in the tables of contents pages.  Now as I am posting the eleventh, Con Version,  again written in collaboration with Eric R. Ashley, I am again offering a set of “behind the writings” insights.  This “behind the writings” look may contain spoilers because it sometimes talks about my expectations for the futures of the characters and stories–although it sometimes raises ideas that were never pursued, as being written partially concurrently with the story it sometimes discusses where I thought it was headed.  You might want to read the referenced chapters before reading this look at them.  Links below (the section headings) will take you to the specific individual chapters being discussed, and there are (or will soon be) links on those pages to bring you back hopefully to the same point here.

This is the ninth post for this novel, covering chapters 97 through 108.  Previous mark Joseph “young” behind-the-writings web log posts for this book include:

  1. #498:  Characters Restart covering chapters 1 through 12;
  2. #501:  Characters Orienting, covering chapters 13 through 24;
  3. #502:  Verser Setbacks, chapters 25 through 36;
  4. #503:  Versers Progress, chapters 37 through 48;
  5. #505:  Versers Advance, chapters 49 through 60;
  6. #506:  Characters Involved, chapters 61 through 72;
  7. #509:  Character Challenges, chapters 73 through 84; and
  8. #510:  Versers Debate, chapters 85 through 96.

There is also a section of the site, Multiverser Novel Support Pages, in which I have begun to place materials related to the novels beginning with character papers for the major characters, giving them at different stages as they move through the books.  This is also the longest book to date, and has quite a few long chapters in it, so there will be quite a few of these background articles.

History of the series, including the reason it started, the origins of character names and details, and many of the ideas, are in earlier posts, and won’t be repeated here.

Return to Top

Quick links to discussions in this page:
Chapter 97 Takano 115
Chapter 98 Brown 316
Chapter 99 Cooper 32
Chapter 100, Brown 317
Chapter 101, Takano 116
Chapter 102, Brown 318
Chapter 103, Cooper 33
Chapter 104, Brown 319
Chapter 105, Cooper 34
Chapter 106, Brown 320
Chapter 107, Takano 117
Chapter 108, Brown 321

Chapter 97, Takano 115

Eric wrote this, covering a month and reducing Varlax’ absence to a single chapter.

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Chapter 98, Brown 316

Eric wrote a massive chapter with a huge confusing dream or vision sequence here, and although I was uncomfortable with a lot of it, I decided to keep it, but to break it into shorter chapters and to make a few minor tweaks.  I wound up with six chapters, not all of them actually short, but the first one covers all that precedes the vision.

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Chapter 99, Cooper 32

Eric had set up the bank robbery, so I tackled the scene itself.  We had discussed the powers to go with the names Major Pain and Private Problem.  Having written as far as drawing the sword, I decided to make that the cliffhanger and return to the scene in the next Cooper chapter.

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Chapter 100, Brown 317

Eric’s dream sequence begins here, and I made a chapter of what seemed the first natural chunk, an introduction to the vision within a vision.

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Chapter 101, Takano 116

Eric drafted this as Tommy’s exit.  We had agreed on the framework that she would be trying to rescue a child from copperheads and would be bitten, but we had some difficulty with the execution.  Eric had envisioned a terrain that might exist in the mountains at the north end of the state, but not in the Cohansey Aquifer of this setting.  I made a lot of tweaks to get it to fit the setting.

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Chapter 102, Brown 318

Eric’s dream sequence at this point shifted into its first major scene, which I cut into its own chapter.

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Chapter 103, Cooper 33

When I had left the scene hanging, I was not certain what I was going to do with it.  I returned perhaps an hour later to finish the encounter.  The Hebrews quote is in the language of Young’s Literal Translation, the preferred translation of the player on whom the character is based.

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Chapter 104, Brown 319

The second major scene of Eric’s dream sequence was shorter, but still formed a coherent chapter.

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Chapter 105, Cooper 34

This chapter was originally Takano 117, but when Eric wrote Takano 117 he brought it to a confrontation with Cooper, and when I was catching up I was unaware that this had been continued in Cooper 34 two chapters later, and thought Eric was asking me to finish it.  I wrote the rest, and then when I got to Cooper 34 realized that there was overlap.  Being uncomfortable with a chapter that took Cooper back to the bank preceding one that had him across town meeting Tommy, I swapped them and did a bit of editing to make them work.

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Chapter 106, Brown 320

The vision shifts into a history lesson badly skewed toward what the south believed caused the war, and I included the suggestion that this was not necessarily the actual history of anything, and his vision was not something from the King but an explanation by the Spirit of New Orleans.

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Chapter 107, Takano 117

This had been chapter 105, but there was some confusing temporal overlap between the Cooper 34 chapter Eric had written here and the Takano 117 chapter he had written there, so I swapped them, completed this one, and tweaked them to fit.

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Chapter 108, Brown 321

This was the final chapter of the vision Eric had written, which I sliced into a conclusion with its denouement.

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This has been the ninth behind-the-writings look at Con Version.  If there is interest and continued support from readers we will endeavor to continue with more behind-the-writings posts and another novel.