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#515: Verser Troubles

January 19, 2025 M.J. Leave a comment

This is mark Joseph “young” blog entry #515, on the subject of Verser Troubles.

With permission of Valdron Inc I have previously completed publishing my first ten Multiverser novels,

Verse Three, Chapter One: The First Multiverser Novel,
Old Verses New,
For Better or Verse,
Spy Verses,
Garden of Versers,
Versers Versus Versers,
Re Verse All,
In Verse Proportion,
Con Verse Lea, and
In Version, in collaboration with Eric R. Ashley,

in serialized form on the web (those links will take you to the table of contents for each book). Along with each book there was also a series of web log posts looking at the writing process, the decisions and choices that delivered the final product; those posts are indexed with the chapters in the tables of contents pages. Now as I am posting the eleventh, Con Version, again written in collaboration with Eric R. Ashley, I am again offering a set of “behind the writings” insights. This “behind the writings” look may contain spoilers because it sometimes talks about my expectations for the futures of the characters and stories–although it sometimes raises ideas that were never pursued, as being written partially concurrently with the story it sometimes discusses where I thought it was headed. You might want to read the referenced chapters before reading this look at them. Links below (the section headings) will take you to the specific individual chapters being discussed, and there are (or will soon be) links on those pages to bring you back hopefully to the same point here.

This is the eleventh post for this novel, covering chapters 121 through 132. Previous mark Joseph “young” behind-the-writings web log posts for this book include:

#498: Characters Restart covering chapters 1 through 12;
#501: Characters Orienting, covering chapters 13 through 24;
#502: Verser Setbacks, chapters 25 through 36;
#503: Versers Progress, chapters 37 through 48;
#505: Versers Advance, chapters 49 through 60;
#506: Characters Involved, chapters 61 through 72;
#509: Character Challenges, chapters 73 through 84;
#510: Versers Debate, chapters 85 through 96;
#511: Characters Change, chapters 87 through 108; and
#512: Versers Work, chapters 109 through 120.

There is also a section of the site, Multiverser Novel Support Pages, in which I have begun to place materials related to the novels beginning with character papers for the major characters, giving them at different stages as they move through the books. This is also the longest book to date, and has quite a few long chapters in it, so there will be quite a few of these background articles.

History of the series, including the reason it started, the origins of character names and details, and many of the ideas, are in earlier posts, and won’t be repeated here.

Quick links to discussions in this page:
Chapter 121 Cooper 39
Chapter 122 Takano 122
Chapter 123 Brown 326
Chapter 124, Cooper 40
Chapter 125, Takano 123
Chapter 126, Brown 327
Chapter 127, Cooper 41
Chapter 128, Brown 328
Chapter 129, Takano 124
Chapter 130, Cooper 42
Chapter 131, Brown 329
Chapter 132, Takano 125

Chapter 121, Cooper 39

A lot of disconnected details merged here. I had noted that Brian had no way to transport the sword without it showing, and suggested that a duffelbag would be the solution, but then forgot; however, I noticed that Brian s clothing selection was quite sparse and had nothing appropriate for 1950s office work. Also, Eric had earlier attempted to send Tommy clothes shopping, until I pointed out that she had purchased several period-appropriate outfits in the suburbia world and that chapter was redirected to laundry. So I suggested that Eric put together a shopping trip here, and gave him some tips on what people wore to the office in the 1950s.

The suggestions that Cooper wanted to acquire some camping gear. that he was worrying about depleting his money, and that he decided to go on patrol were Eric s. I made a side list of exactly what was purchased, along with prices, to get the total in the text.

Chapter 122, Takano 122

I tackled this, trying to think of ideas that would make sense to researchers in the 1950s that Tommy and Brian could bring to the table.

Chapter 123, Brown 326

Eric had made some suggestions concerning the direction for Derek s story, and before I managed to respond he had drafted most of this chapter. I was intending for there to be two things before anything else happened, one that Derek would share information about the vampires with the band, the other that there would be news that suggested a vampire attack. However, the rat attack was going to be the next step, so I wrote a new opening for the chapter and then went with what Eric had created.

Chapter 124, Cooper 40

Eric suggested that Cooper should join up with Tell and face a supervillain. I suggested Blue Ray, and they discussed his identity and powers. I then drafted this, bringing Tommy into it as well.

Chapter 125, Takano 123

Eric had given a couple ideas for this fight, and I had tossed out a few more, and then returned after dinner to put it together.

Chapter 126, Brown 327

Eric drafted this entry in which one of the Mardi Gras black tribes becomes integrated, joined by a group of liberal Whites calling themselves the Club of the Blind Men, and supported by the music of the Living Colors Dixieland Gospel Band.

Chapter 127, Cooper 41

I drafted this, realizing that we had done nothing about Cooper looking for a church, which is something that would matter to him. As I started I had forgotten the encounter at the bank and so was thinking Tommy had done better than he had, but it came back to mind so I included it. I also remembered the difficulties of the early days when banks closed at three and people got paid by check late on Thursday or sometimes Friday morning.

Chapter 128, Brown 328

Stuck on what to do with Tommy, I changed the heading here to Brown. We had discussed the notion of Derek locating the mausoleum by aerial recon, and I decided to introduce it at this point.

Chapter 129, Takano 124

I started this but was called away; Eric picked it up and finished it, but there were a lot of issues with amounts of money, 1950s pay rates and prices, so I did a bit of tweaking.

Chapter 130, Cooper 42

Eric wrote this, introducing a retired superhero and setting up a disaster. I decided that would be a good cliffhanger, but went back and backwrote what Cooper would have taken with him on the hike so that he would have the duffel with him.

Chapter 131, Brown 329

I drafted this. I wanted it to take a while to find the mausoleum, but didn t want a lot of boring chapters about it.

Chapter 132, Takano 125

I wasn t sure what to do with Tommy, so I did the mundane things. Eric expanded it to include the near death experience and the encounter with Robinette, and left it for me to resolve.

This has been the eleventh behind-the-writings look at Con Version. If there is interest and continued support from readers we will endeavor to continue with more behind-the-writings posts and another novel.

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#512: Versers Work

December 28, 2024 M.J. Leave a comment

This is mark Joseph “young” blog entry #512, on the subject of Versers Work.

With permission of Valdron Inc I have previously completed publishing my first ten Multiverser novels,

Verse Three, Chapter One: The First Multiverser Novel,
Old Verses New,
For Better or Verse,
Spy Verses,
Garden of Versers,
Versers Versus Versers,
Re Verse All,
In Verse Proportion,
Con Verse Lea, and
In Version, in collaboration with Eric R. Ashley,

in serialized form on the web (those links will take you to the table of contents for each book). Along with each book there was also a series of web log posts looking at the writing process, the decisions and choices that delivered the final product; those posts are indexed with the chapters in the tables of contents pages. Now as I am posting the eleventh, Con Version, again written in collaboration with Eric R. Ashley, I am again offering a set of “behind the writings” insights. This “behind the writings” look may contain spoilers because it sometimes talks about my expectations for the futures of the characters and stories–although it sometimes raises ideas that were never pursued, as being written partially concurrently with the story it sometimes discusses where I thought it was headed. You might want to read the referenced chapters before reading this look at them. Links below (the section headings) will take you to the specific individual chapters being discussed, and there are (or will soon be) links on those pages to bring you back hopefully to the same point here.

This is the tenth post for this novel, covering chapters 109 through 120. Previous mark Joseph “young” behind-the-writings web log posts for this book include:

#498: Characters Restart covering chapters 1 through 12;
#501: Characters Orienting, covering chapters 13 through 24;
#502: Verser Setbacks, chapters 25 through 36;
#503: Versers Progress, chapters 37 through 48;
#505: Versers Advance, chapters 49 through 60;
#506: Characters Involved, chapters 61 through 72;
#509: Character Challenges, chapters 73 through 84;
#510: Versers Debate, chapters 85 through 96; and
#511: Characters Change, chapters 87 through 108.

There is also a section of the site, Multiverser Novel Support Pages, in which I have begun to place materials related to the novels beginning with character papers for the major characters, giving them at different stages as they move through the books. This is also the longest book to date, and has quite a few long chapters in it, so there will be quite a few of these background articles.

History of the series, including the reason it started, the origins of character names and details, and many of the ideas, are in earlier posts, and won’t be repeated here.

Quick links to discussions in this page:
Chapter 109 Cooper 35
Chapter 110 Takano 118
Chapter 111 Brown 322
Chapter 112, Cooper 36
Chapter 113, Takano 119
Chapter 114, Brown 323
Chapter 115, Cooper 37
Chapter 116, Takano 120
Chapter 117, Brown 324
Chapter 118, Cooper 38
Chapter 119, Takano 121
Chapter 120, Brown 325

Chapter 109, Cooper 35

I decided it was time to go back to alternating the three characters, so I started with Cooper heading back toward Tommy, and then inserted the Takano chapter after it.

Chapter 110, Takano 118

I flowed from Cooper 35 into this, but got confused in the middle of it, shifting to his perspective, and had to go back and rewrite it to keep it with her.

Chapter 111, Brown 322

Eric drafted this, taking Derek to another predominantly segregated church, where the segregation makes sense because most of the congregants speak Chinese and are trying to learn English.

After what was to have been the final edit, as I was setting up Derek’s character paper, I realized that we had confused Mandarin and Cantonese–Mandarin is the dialect Derek had learned as a spy, and Cantonese the one he was only now starting to learn. I had to come back and make a few changes to this chapter to clarify that.

Chapter 112, Cooper 36

I drafted this after finishing Takano 118, because I wanted to get in the conversation about computers and the suggestion that both Cooper and Tommy could possibly get jobs in the industry.

Chapter 113, Takano 119

In Eric’s original draft Tommy went shopping but bought things she already had. I pointed this out, so Eric rewrote it as a trip to the laundromat.

Eric put Tommy in a dark blue calf-length skirt, but I shortened it, thinking that the skirts worn by teens in the 1950s were knee-length.

Eric had ended this with Tommy taking a long bath, but wanting to accelerate events in their secret identity lives I had inadvertently continued with Cooper taking her to meet Keller, so Eric came back and backwrote this to fit that.

Chapter 114, Brown 323

On a readthrough following my hospitalization I spotted the fact that Pierre Hunter had given Derek a “ring of keys”, and realized that at this point he could only really account for the front door and maybe the back door. Between us we had dismissed the notion that there would be a gunlock on the shotgun, and decided that one of the keys opened a cabinet somewhere in the house that they had not yet found. We discussed what might be in it, and since I proposed that it would contain information about the monsters, I ultimately drafted this. I thought there should be “several” folders, but couldn’t figure out what they would cover besides the three monsters Eric had uncovered in his research, so I stuck to three.

Eric’s research gave him this: “locals believe that the city is actually the home of real vampires. During the 1930s, brothers John and Wayne Carter were executed for committing multiple murders. About a dozen bodies, drained of their blood, were discovered after a bloodied young woman managed to escape from their apartment. Sightings of the brothers are often reported to this very day, as their bodies mysteriously vanished from the family’s funeral vault.” We pushed them back a few decades, and discussed them in some detail.

Chapter 115, Cooper 37

I drafted this, but before I had finished Eric pointed out that the previous Takano chapter had her returning from the laundromat in different clothes and immediately taking a bath. Because it seemed important to streamline getting them working, we agreed to backwrite the previous material to fit with this.

Chapter 116, Takano 120

Eric drafted this, introducing the idea that Brian and Tommy were sort of “rubberstamped” into their jobs. He also came up with Janus Cutter as the name for Doctor Mordenslice’ secret identity.

Chapter 117, Brown 324

We discussed the design of these particular vampires, agreeing that they would be similar to but distinct from those in Lauren’s early stories. I pieced together some of what we had agreed on into Hunter’s file. We wanted there to be some sort of cryptic clue to the location of the graves, but all I could think of at the time was that they weren’t on holy ground so they could have been in a Cajun graveyard outside the city. I also added the notion that they were often active around Mardi Gras, as that was our next confrontation.

Chapter 118, Cooper 38

I was jotting down notes on this, and decided to go ahead and write it. The name Granville and some of the characteristics came from a veterinarian character in the original BBC television production of All Creatures Great and Small. I was going to cut it shorter, but decided to finish the meeting and then figure out what Tommy does next.

Chapter 119, Takano 121

I did this wrap-up of the day largely to get back to Derek and Brian, but thought that a bit of the lot of girls in the workplace ought to be considered. My plan includes that at some point she’s going to show her worth to the engineers, but not quite yet.

Chapter 120, Brown 325

I suggested that having been to a few Catholic services I should write the chapter in which Derek goes to church with Pierre, and Eric agreed that his own experience, limited to a couple weddings and a funeral, would be inadequate.

Realizing that there was separatism in the Catholic church that didn’t exist in the individual Protestant churches, I brought that forward into the theme.

This has been the tenth behind-the-writings look at Con Version. If there is interest and continued support from readers we will endeavor to continue with more behind-the-writings posts and another novel.

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#511: Characters Change

December 8, 2024 M.J. 4 Comments

This is mark Joseph “young” blog entry #511, on the subject of Characters Change.

With permission of Valdron Inc I have previously completed publishing my first ten Multiverser novels,

Verse Three, Chapter One: The First Multiverser Novel,
Old Verses New,
For Better or Verse,
Spy Verses,
Garden of Versers,
Versers Versus Versers,
Re Verse All,
In Verse Proportion,
Con Verse Lea, and
In Version, in collaboration with Eric R. Ashley,

2 in serialized form on the web (those links will take you to the table of contents for each book). Along with each book there was also a series of web log posts looking at the writing process, the decisions and choices that delivered the final product; those posts are indexed with the chapters in the tables of contents pages. Now as I am posting the eleventh, Con Version, again written in collaboration with Eric R. Ashley, I am again offering a set of “behind the writings” insights. This “behind the writings” look may contain spoilers because it sometimes talks about my expectations for the futures of the characters and stories–although it sometimes raises ideas that were never pursued, as being written partially concurrently with the story it sometimes discusses where I thought it was headed. You might want to read the referenced chapters before reading this look at them. Links below (the section headings) will take you to the specific individual chapters being discussed, and there are (or will soon be) links on those pages to bring you back hopefully to the same point here.

This is the ninth post for this novel, covering chapters 97 through 108. Previous mark Joseph “young” behind-the-writings web log posts for this book include:

#498: Characters Restart covering chapters 1 through 12;
#501: Characters Orienting, covering chapters 13 through 24;
#502: Verser Setbacks, chapters 25 through 36;
#503: Versers Progress, chapters 37 through 48;
#505: Versers Advance, chapters 49 through 60;
#506: Characters Involved, chapters 61 through 72;
#509: Character Challenges, chapters 73 through 84; and
#510: Versers Debate, chapters 85 through 96.

There is also a section of the site, Multiverser Novel Support Pages, in which I have begun to place materials related to the novels beginning with character papers for the major characters, giving them at different stages as they move through the books. This is also the longest book to date, and has quite a few long chapters in it, so there will be quite a few of these background articles.

History of the series, including the reason it started, the origins of character names and details, and many of the ideas, are in earlier posts, and won’t be repeated here.

Quick links to discussions in this page:
Chapter 97 Takano 115
Chapter 98 Brown 316
Chapter 99 Cooper 32
Chapter 100, Brown 317
Chapter 101, Takano 116
Chapter 102, Brown 318
Chapter 103, Cooper 33
Chapter 104, Brown 319
Chapter 105, Cooper 34
Chapter 106, Brown 320
Chapter 107, Takano 117
Chapter 108, Brown 321

Chapter 97, Takano 115

Eric wrote this, covering a month and reducing Varlax’ absence to a single chapter.

Chapter 98, Brown 316

Eric wrote a massive chapter with a huge confusing dream or vision sequence here, and although I was uncomfortable with a lot of it, I decided to keep it, but to break it into shorter chapters and to make a few minor tweaks. I wound up with six chapters, not all of them actually short, but the first one covers all that precedes the vision.

Chapter 99, Cooper 32

Eric had set up the bank robbery, so I tackled the scene itself. We had discussed the powers to go with the names Major Pain and Private Problem. Having written as far as drawing the sword, I decided to make that the cliffhanger and return to the scene in the next Cooper chapter.

Chapter 100, Brown 317

Eric’s dream sequence begins here, and I made a chapter of what seemed the first natural chunk, an introduction to the vision within a vision.

Chapter 101, Takano 116

Eric drafted this as Tommy’s exit. We had agreed on the framework that she would be trying to rescue a child from copperheads and would be bitten, but we had some difficulty with the execution. Eric had envisioned a terrain that might exist in the mountains at the north end of the state, but not in the Cohansey Aquifer of this setting. I made a lot of tweaks to get it to fit the setting.

Chapter 102, Brown 318

Eric’s dream sequence at this point shifted into its first major scene, which I cut into its own chapter.

Chapter 103, Cooper 33

When I had left the scene hanging, I was not certain what I was going to do with it. I returned perhaps an hour later to finish the encounter. The Hebrews quote is in the language of Young’s Literal Translation, the preferred translation of the player on whom the character is based.

Chapter 104, Brown 319

The second major scene of Eric’s dream sequence was shorter, but still formed a coherent chapter.

Chapter 105, Cooper 34

This chapter was originally Takano 117, but when Eric wrote Takano 117 he brought it to a confrontation with Cooper, and when I was catching up I was unaware that this had been continued in Cooper 34 two chapters later, and thought Eric was asking me to finish it. I wrote the rest, and then when I got to Cooper 34 realized that there was overlap. Being uncomfortable with a chapter that took Cooper back to the bank preceding one that had him across town meeting Tommy, I swapped them and did a bit of editing to make them work.

Chapter 106, Brown 320

The vision shifts into a history lesson badly skewed toward what the south believed caused the war, and I included the suggestion that this was not necessarily the actual history of anything, and his vision was not something from the King but an explanation by the Spirit of New Orleans.

Chapter 107, Takano 117

This had been chapter 105, but there was some confusing temporal overlap between the Cooper 34 chapter Eric had written here and the Takano 117 chapter he had written there, so I swapped them, completed this one, and tweaked them to fit.

Chapter 108, Brown 321

This was the final chapter of the vision Eric had written, which I sliced into a conclusion with its denouement.

This has been the ninth behind-the-writings look at Con Version. If there is interest and continued support from readers we will endeavor to continue with more behind-the-writings posts and another novel.

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#509: Character Challenges

October 13, 2024 M.J. Leave a comment

This is mark Joseph “young” blog entry #509, on the subject of Character Challenges.

With permission of Valdron Inc I have previously completed publishing my first ten Multiverser novels,

Verse Three, Chapter One: The First Multiverser Novel,
Old Verses New,
For Better or Verse,
Spy Verses,
Garden of Versers,
Versers Versus Versers,
Re Verse All,
In Verse Proportion,
Con Verse Lea, and
In Version, in collaboration with Eric R. Ashley,

in serialized form on the web (those links will take you to the table of contents for each book). Along with each book there was also a series of web log posts looking at the writing process, the decisions and choices that delivered the final product; those posts are indexed with the chapters in the tables of contents pages. Now as I am posting the eleventh, Con Version, again written in collaboration with Eric R. Ashley, I am again offering a set of “behind the writings” insights. This “behind the writings” look may contain spoilers because it sometimes talks about my expectations for the futures of the characters and stories–although it sometimes raises ideas that were never pursued, as being written partially concurrently with the story it sometimes discusses where I thought it was headed. You might want to read the referenced chapters before reading this look at them. Links below (the section headings) will take you to the specific individual chapters being discussed, and there are (or will soon be) links on those pages to bring you back hopefully to the same point here.

This is the seventh post for this novel, covering chapters 73 through 84. Previous mark Joseph “young” behind-the-writings web log posts for this book include:

#498: Characters Restart covering chapters 1 through 12;
#501: Characters Orienting, covering chapters 13 through 24;
#502: Verser Setbacks, chapters 25 through 36;
#503: Versers Progress, chapters 37 through 48;
#505: Versers Advance, chapters 49 through 60; and
#506: Characters Involved, chapters 61 through 72.

There is also a section of the site, Multiverser Novel Support Pages, in which I have begun to place materials related to the novels beginning with character papers for the major characters, giving them at different stages as they move through the books. This is also the longest book to date, and has quite a few long chapters in it, so there will be quite a few of these background articles.

History of the series, including the reason it started, the origins of character names and details, and many of the ideas, are in earlier posts, and won’t be repeated here.

Quick links to discussions in this page:
Chapter 73, Brown 307
Chapter 74, Cooper 24
Chapter 75, Brown 308
Chapter 76, Takano 108
Chapter 77, Brown 309
Chapter 78, Cooper 25
Chapter 79, Takano 109
Chapter 80, Brown 310
Chapter 81, Cooper 26
Chapter 82, Takano 110
Chapter 83, Brown 311
Chapter 84, Cooper 27

Chapter 73, Brown 307

I suggested that we needed a chapter to fill in an ordinary December before we hit Yule, so Eric drafted this.

He left gaps for me to fill in music, and I picked I Heard the Bells because it comes from the Civil War.

There was also a question about the Rougarou, Eric having written that Emma Malcolm had mentioned it, and I not recalling that but thinking she had only suggested trouble coming at Yule. We discussed it, and went back to Brown 303, later bumped to 304, to add it.

Reading Eric’s section on the Biloxi hurricane, I suggested expanding to include questions of the mayor’s integrity, and eventually added several paragraphs for that.

Chapter 74, Cooper 24

We had a lot of discussion concerning the locale of our superhero setting. Eric wanted to avoid New York City mostly because everyone uses it. I wanted it to be close to the mountains because of the equipment problem. We agreed on somewhere in the Rockies, and by the time Eric wrote this we had agreed on southern Colorado, in the area currently labeled the Rio Grande National Forest. I suggested that John Muir and Theodore Roosevelt never met, and so the national parks and forests systems were never launched. Eric brought forward the possibility that some supervillain might plan to do something with the volcano under Yellowstone.

I rewrote much of this. Eric had overlooked the fact that there would be no light in the library until the power was restored, and when that happened there was at least every reason for Brian to believe the force field would reactivate. His take was that Brian would eventually find the force field generator, which would have been built of components he did not recognize but melted mostly to slag as a single-use device. My view was that it would have been built of components available in the 1950s, and so look very like the inside of a radio or old television with vacuum tubes and such, and would be plugged into the wall somewhere.

We were also uncertain whether he would get anything else from the house, or indeed whether the house would be left to him. Eric decided to give him a few things and leave everything else to family. That meant that he would have to leave the house, and couldn’t take the device with him.

I also am old enough to remember how you call the police in the 1950s.

Chapter 75, Brown 308

When it appeared that the Brown story was reaching the deadline date without having achieved sufficient backstory, I inserted this chapter as a space to be filled. I was brainstorming for story ideas, but for a time the only one was to have a white boy assault a black girl and apparently get away with it.

The insertion of course shifted all subsequent chapter numbers and Brown chapter numbers plus one, which made plus two.

Returning from the hospital, I began re-reading the entire book to get back into the sense of things, and saw that in what became Brown 309 Eric had mentioned that one of the bands at Yule was a mixed-race band. I immediately balked at this–mixed race bands were unknown before about the 1950s or 60s–but then thought this could work if 2) the existence of that band was emphasized and 1) if they could set up some kind of event which suggested that Living Colors was responsible for it. That was my objective here.

Chapter 76, Takano 108

Eric drafted this to give us more of a feeling of struggling through the winter, and to give Tommy bowhunting experience.

Chapter 77, Brown 309

We had agreed that Yule was coming, and the band would face the Rougarou, which would be rampaging through the city. Eric put it together with a bit of tweaking from me.

Chapter 78, Cooper 25

Trying to figure out what Cooper could do with his grocery bags, I considered a hotel room, which would require money, which meant selling one of the gold coins from the money belt. This put me on a search for the price of gold in the 1950s and the value of money at that time, and while I was working on that it occurred to me that a bus locker would be adequate to the purpose, for which he would still need money, but then I remembered that the equipment sheet Eric had provided included a few coins, and while they weren’t legal tender they were the right shape and weight for a coin machine, and particularly the nickel, which had not changed much. So by the time he had finished this chapter we knew what the gold coins were worth in the money of the time, and what that meant in terms of purchasing power, even though at that point we didn’t need it.

Eric picked up the story to create the Blackmask Gang encounter, which I tweaked a bit to eliminate a problem with reopening and relocking the locker.

Chapter 79, Takano 109

Eric had left the hunt in the middle, and after reading it I thought that the hunters were probably killing deer rather indiscriminately, and remembered that one of the rules of modern hunting is you prefer the bucks. If you kill enough does and fawns you reduce the deer population drastically, but as long as you have one or two surviving bucks you get another generation.

Picking up from this, Eric drafted this chapter, putting the problem directly in Tommy’s face.

Chapter 80, Brown 310

I commented about here that it often seemed we were playing Multiverser, that Eric would create a situation and wait for me to figure a way out of it. That, though, created interesting stories, so it was good.

Puzzling over the problem set up at the end of Brown 309 (previously 307), I considered and rejected the same solutions I wrote for Derek, and for the same reasons. However, when I thought about having Derek turn into a sprite, it struck me that a sprite looked like a tiny angel, and he could use that to his advantage, except that before he could become Morach he would have to become Ferris, who looks more like a gargoyle than anything else. That, though, got me thinking. The body skill Derek uses lets him reduce himself by up to half in every dimension, and increase himself by as much as doubling in every dimension, done by thinking of the person he is when that size. The only reason he couldn’t get larger or smaller ultimately is that he doesn’t have a named persona conceptualized for those sizes. Could he imagine such a persona, give it a name, and become that person? I posed it to Eric, and separately to John Walker (on whom the James Beam character is based, who has been playing since before the game was published), and while both were hesitant, both agreed it was possible, and so I drafted it into the story here.

Eric had to do a bit of editing at the end because I got the geography wrong, not realizing that Alphonso had left the stage.

Chapter 81, Cooper 26

I had left a note for Eric concerning the trip ahead, and in the process composed the meeting with The Eagle, including most of the conversation and the mention of William Tell Junior. He came back the next day and covered the hike very briefly, going directly to the meeting, and adding a few bits including the motorcycle and the offer of a ride to the city.

The comment about why it wasn’t a National Park is of course one of the differences between universes: in our world, this location is the Rio Grande National Forest, but we eliminated the National Parks system and put a city on the river here.

Chapter 82, Takano 110

I drafted this, and as soon as I finished it I realized that I had thought Davey would be at the meeting and forgot to include him, so I mentioned it to Eric who went back and tweaked it to include him.

Chapter 83, Brown 311

I thought it was important for Derek and Vashti to go back and thank the bull for his hospitality, and that it would only be meaningful if they had treats. I also thought that the restaurant would be closed on Christmas, recalling that so many people attended church on Christmas day back then that they had to make it a Federal holiday because of all the call-outs. That also meant that the members of the band would be in church. Pierre would be Catholic because it’s the leading religion in France, Maurice Baptist because that was strong among southern Blacks, and a lookup confirmed that Presbyterians were a strong group in China around 1900.

Chapter 84, Cooper 27

Eric drafted this, but I swept through and made a lot of suggestions for changes, because we had a different notion of when Cooper would change out of his uniform, Eric having it done at the bus station and so revealing his identity to The Eagle, I keeping him in costume until in the room so he could keep that secret. I also expanded the dialogue at the front desk, and this led to questions about later parts of the chapter. We agreed on a cooperative rewrite of portions to accommodate this.

This has been the seventh behind-the-writings look at Con Version. If there is interest and continued support from readers we will endeavor to continue with more behind-the-writings posts and another novel.

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#506: Characters Involved

September 22, 2024 M.J. Leave a comment

This is mark Joseph “young” blog entry #506, on the subject of Characters Involved.

With permission of Valdron Inc I have previously completed publishing my first ten Multiverser novels,

Verse Three, Chapter One: The First Multiverser Novel,
Old Verses New,
For Better or Verse,
Spy Verses,
Garden of Versers,
Versers Versus Versers,
Re Verse All,
In Verse Proportion,
Con Verse Lea, and
In Version, in collaboration with Eric R. Ashley,

in serialized form on the web (those links will take you to the table of contents for each book). Along with each book there was also a series of web log posts looking at the writing process, the decisions and choices that delivered the final product; those posts are indexed with the chapters in the tables of contents pages. Now as I am posting the eleventh, Con Version, again written in collaboration with Eric R. Ashley, I am again offering a set of “behind the writings” insights. This “behind the writings” look may contain spoilers because it sometimes talks about my expectations for the futures of the characters and stories–although it sometimes raises ideas that were never pursued, as being written partially concurrently with the story it sometimes discusses where I thought it was headed. You might want to read the referenced chapters before reading this look at them. Links below (the section headings) will take you to the specific individual chapters being discussed, and there are (or will soon be) links on those pages to bring you back hopefully to the same point here.

This is the sixth post for this novel, covering chapters 61 through 72. Previous mark Joseph “young” behind-the-writings web log posts for this book include:

#498: Characters Restart covering chapters 1 through 12;
#501: Characters Orienting, covering chapters 13 through 24;
#502: Verser Setbacks, chapters 25 through 36;
#503: Versers Progress, chapters 37 through 48; and
#505: Versers Advance, chapters 49 through 60.

There is also a section of the site, Multiverser Novel Support Pages, in which I have begun to place materials related to the novels beginning with character papers for the major characters, giving them at different stages as they move through the books. This is also the longest book to date, and has quite a few long chapters in it, so there will be quite a few of these background articles.

History of the series, including the reason it started, the origins of character names and details, and many of the ideas, are in earlier posts, and won’t be repeated here.

Quick links to discussions in this page:
Chapter 61, Brown 303
Chapter 62, Cooper 20
Chapter 63, Takano 104
Chapter 64, Brown 304
Chapter 65, Cooper 21
Chapter 66, Takano 105
Chapter 67, Brown 305
Chapter 68, Cooper 22
Chapter 69, Takano 106
Chapter 70, Brown 306
Chapter 71, Cooper 23
Chapter 72, Takano 107

Chapter 61, Brown 303

Eric tackled this, with a surprise twist in the story.

Eric had mentioned here that Derek and Vashti had explained being versers to Maurice before, and I had not remembered that, so I went back to Brown 291 and expanded it to make the reference more credible.

Chapter 62, Cooper 20

Continuing our agreed script, Eric drafted this. There were a few edits to deal with our language problems, but it brought us to where we wanted to be.

Chapter 63, Takano 104

Eric drafted all of this, with the washing and the cold water, the proposal and the gifts, and the reaction of the crowd. He had intended to include the wedding, but the passage was long enough.

Chapter 64, Brown 304

Eric had suggested that Derek’s group should lose this fight, but I couldn’t see how Derek, with his history and all his powers, could credibly lose a fight in these circumstances even if the entire neighborhood came down on them. It wasn’t exactly a bluff, but having Derek demonstrate what he could do enabled him to win without either hurting anyone or being hurt.

I had formed most of this in my head before Eric had written Takano 103, so I jumped ahead and wrote it.

We had been trying to think of a name for the band, and I was toying with the idea of brown and white, and thought of The Brown White and Yellow Band, but realized I was omitting Vashti, so I rethought it as The Living Colors Dixieland Gospel Band, which Eric agreed was good and fit the subtheme of interracial relations.

Drafting what was Brown 306 bumped to 307, Eric said that Emma Malcolm had mentioned the Rougarou, but in the original draft of this chapter she hadn’t. We agreed to go back and find a way to include it without making her appear prescient.

Chapter 65, Cooper 21

We had discussed this at length, but Eric went a bit off script with the miracle crossbow shot.

Chapter 66, Takano 105

I drafted this, wanting to have Tomiko conduct the wedding and put a bit more backstory into the text so it was explained that they had marriages and wedding ceremonies of a sort back in the caves.

Chapter 67, Brown 305

Both of us recognized that there would be questions after the display at the Malcolm house, so I tackled that here. I also wanted to bring one of the younger Malcolm brothers over to their side.

Chapter 68, Cooper 22

We were discussing possible next worlds for several weeks as we recognized the approaching end of Cooper’s William Tell story, and one of Eric’s suggestions was a low-power supers world. He wrote this to demonstrate how it would work, and when we reached the point at which Cooper versed out we moved it from the notes to the text as the next chapter.

Chapter 69, Takano 106

Having written several previous fictional weddings, I was hesitant to tackle another; but I wanted to write the next Cooper chapter and preferred not to leap ahead when it’s not necessary, so I pulled together a few thoughts to create this chapter.

Chapter 70, Brown 306

Eric started this. I had suggested names for the Malcolm family, and Eric took them in the order I had given and chose the penultimate brother as the one at the door. I added the last few paragraphs when the subject changes to discussing the band; we had agreed on the name of the band, and that the Malcolm boy would suggest it.

Chapter 71, Cooper 23

I had been worried about how Cooper would get out of the forcefield trap for several days, but then hit upon a solution and said I wanted to write this chapter.

Chapter 72, Takano 107

Trying to move the story forward, I decided to cover the construction of the log cabin. The idea of having Tommy come to dinner was quite honestly filling out the chapter.

The joke about the United States of Amiska was Eric’s idea, although I actually framed it within the text.

This has been the sixth behind-the-writings look at Con Version. If there is interest and continued support from readers we will endeavor to continue with more behind-the-writings posts and another novel.

Bible and Theology, Books by the Author

#505: Versers Advance

September 1, 2024 M.J. Leave a comment

This is mark Joseph “young” blog entry #505, on the subject of Versers Advance.

With permission of Valdron Inc I have previously completed publishing my first ten Multiverser novels,

Verse Three, Chapter One: The First Multiverser Novel,
Old Verses New,
For Better or Verse,
Spy Verses,
Garden of Versers,
Versers Versus Versers,
Re Verse All,
In Verse Proportion,
Con Verse Lea, and
In Version, in collaboration with Eric R. Ashley,

in serialized form on the web (those links will take you to the table of contents for each book). Along with each book there was also a series of web log posts looking at the writing process, the decisions and choices that delivered the final product; those posts are indexed with the chapters in the tables of contents pages. Now as I am posting the eleventh, Con Version, again written in collaboration with Eric R. Ashley, I am again offering a set of “behind the writings” insights. This “behind the writings” look may contain spoilers because it sometimes talks about my expectations for the futures of the characters and stories–although it sometimes raises ideas that were never pursued, as being written partially concurrently with the story it sometimes discusses where I thought it was headed. You might want to read the referenced chapters before reading this look at them. Links below (the section headings) will take you to the specific individual chapters being discussed, and there are (or will soon be) links on those pages to bring you back hopefully to the same point here.

This is the fifth post for this novel, covering chapters 49 through 60. Previous mark Joseph “young” behind-the-writings web log posts for this book include:

#498: Characters Restart covering chapters 1 through 12;
#501: Characters Orienting, covering chapters 13 through 24;
#502: Verser Setbacks, chapters 25 through 36; and
#503: Versers Progress, chapters 37 through 48.

There is also a section of the site, Multiverser Novel Support Pages, in which I have begun to place materials related to the novels beginning with character papers for the major characters, giving them at different stages as they move through the books. This is also the longest book to date, and has quite a few long chapters in it, so there will be quite a few of these background articles.

History of the series, including the reason it started, the origins of character names and details, and many of the ideas, are in earlier posts, and won’t be repeated here.

Quick links to discussions in this page:
Chapter 49, Brown 299
Chapter 50, Cooper 16
Chapter 51, Takano 100
Chapter 52, Brown 300
Chapter 53, Cooper 17
Chapter 54, Takano 101
Chapter 55, Brown 301
Chapter 56, Cooper 18
Chapter 57, Takano 102
Chapter 58, Brown 302
Chapter 59, Cooper 19
Chapter 60, Takano 103

Chapter 49, Brown 299

We had discussed this at length, and Eric had penned most of the encounter with the Devil which, as mentioned, got moved here to the music hall and after Halloween. We had also agreed that as they were leaving they would meet the Chinese drummer; Eric came up with the name Lei He.

The trick with the cards has often been used to mark someone as a card sharp in film. There’s a joke in my family that one night my father-in-law ran a deck up to his arm that way, asked if anyone wanted to play cards, and flipped them all over in one smooth move. No one volunteered to play.

Chapter 50, Cooper 16

Eric drafted this, following the outline we had discussed. It had to be a tightly plotted story at this point, because there were several scenes that had to have Cooper, Wilhelm, and Hans in the right places.

Chapter 51, Takano 100

Picking up my musings about all the women from whom Davey might choose, Eric drafted this to move toward integrating him into the tribe.

Chapter 52, Brown 300

Because this involved music, I drafted it. I had a pretty good idea of how Chinese Waist Drums were used, and I thought I may actually have seen a performance once.

Chapter 53, Cooper 17

This was part of the outline, that Wilhelm and Cooper would be on a transport downriver to separate trials but the water would be rougher than the soldiers could manage, so they would untie Cooper who would get them to safety and then escape. Because I have over a thousand miles of canoeing experience we agreed that I would draft it.

We could see Cooper’s exit coming, and began discussing worlds to which we could send him.

Chapter 54, Takano 101

Eric drafted this, along the general lines of the story we had been discussing. He had by this point decided who Davey had chosen to marry, but hadn’t told me.

Chapter 55, Brown 301

Since I was the primary writer on the music sections, I drafted this chapter. The mention of Thanksgiving reflected something we had begun discussing behind the scenes, that we needed a Louisiana variant of Thanksgiving dinner to be served at the restaurant.

Chapter 56, Cooper 18

Since I was writing and we had an agreed outline for this, I drafted this chapter to move the story forward to the next connection.

Chapter 57, Takano 102

Eric drafted this, bringing in the idea of a verser rabbit and discussing what happens to animals when they die. I pointed out, privately, that the Bible doesn’t actually tell us what happens to animals when they die, probably because we don’t need to know.

The intelligent verser rabbit with the cybernetic eye is a motif in some of Eric’s stories, a sort of reminder of the ridiculous things that could exist in the multiverse as conceived.

Chapter 58, Brown 302

I drafted this, but the Thanksgiving menu was concocted by Eric (I added the salad, whipped cream, and coffee).

Chapter 59, Cooper 19

Again this fell to me for the theological aspect, as Cooper had to be convicted of heresy by a twelfth century Inquisitor based on some nuance of theology on which people were convicted at the time, while holding to the core of orthodox theology. The statement of faith is essentially the Nicene Creed in the Western version, somewhat paraphrased in spots and from memory.

We had by this point chosen the next world for him, and also decided that we would make it a gather world.

Chapter 60, Takano 103

Eric started writing this before I started on the previous Cooper chapter, and finished it about simultaneously with it. It was roughly following the script.

This has been the fifth behind-the-writings look at Con Version. If there is interest and continued support from readers we will endeavor to continue with more behind-the-writings posts and another novel.

Bible and Theology, Books by the Author, Games, Law and Politics, Memories, Temporal Anomalies/Time Travel

#504: Why I Started Writing

August 29, 2024 M.J. Leave a comment

This is mark Joseph “young” blog entry #504, on the subject of Why I Started Writing.

Someone named Jay Oluwabukunmi contacted me (via LinkedIn) and wrote:

I recently came across your profile and was highly impressed by the quality of your content. Could you kindly share what motivated you to begin writing?

That’s an interesting question with a complicated answer, so I decided it would be better to share it here.

Scratch a writer and you’ll almost always find a reader. I read quite a bit from a very young age, including a fair amount of science fiction and fantasy, but also mysteries, and the Bible, and quite a bit more. I especially enjoyed C. S. Lewis, J. R. R. Tolkien, and Charles Williams, and had a vague notion of writing the next great fantasy novel. I suspect, though, that I was one of thousands who had that notion, and I wasn’t all that devoted to it–I was a musician, and envisioned my immediate future as heading into Christian contemporary records.

Still, I took a class in college entitled Creative Writing: Fiction, partly because I needed to fill a slot and it fit my schedule, partly because I had this notion that when I retired I might write that novel. I even started working on a novel while I was still in school, although it wasn’t all that good and I abandoned it. However, for quite a few years I maintained, intermittently, the practice of keeping a literary journal. My friend C. J. Henderson says don’t do that because you’re never going to sell such a thing, and you shouldn’t waste time writing something for which no one is going to pay you. However, it is not only good practice, I have more than once remembered something I wrote in those journals and used it to write something new.

Pursuing my music career I got a job on the air of a small but significant contemporary Christian radio station, and eventually became the program director. At some point we compiled a mailing list, and management decided we should send out a monthly newsletter. It became my job to create this, so I wrote a fair amount of the content (my degrees in Biblical Studies helped immensely at this point) assisted by our overnight DJ for a time. I also was introduced to the associate editor of a local newspaper, who liked my style and invited me to write some satire for his paper; two columns were published under the name M. Joseph Young, to avoid confusion with the Mark Young who was on the local radio station (also me).

Along the way I discovered role playing games, specifically beginning with Dungeons & Dragons™ but also playing several others in a variety of genres and settings. Largely through this I was introduced to E. R. Jones, who needed someone who could write (and by this time I had finished a juris doctore, so I could certainly handle the technical aspect of writing) to help create a role playing game on which he had been working for half a decade. We put a lot of work into that, he dropped out of the process before the final edit, but I’d made promises and so I pushed through and published Multiverser: The Game: Referee’s Rules along with Multiverser: The First Book of Worlds. I continued on that line, with Multiverser: The Second Book of Worlds, and along with some people working with me on that (artists, supporters, gamers) we tried to make a go of that.

Then someone came up with the idea of creating a Multiverser comic, and as the in-house writer it fell to me to do the text. I created three characters with two stories for each of them to be the basis for three issues, but then the artists said no, it couldn’t be done with our resources. That fell into the back burner, and then emerged as Verse Three, Chapter One: The First Multiverser Novel. I learned quite a bit about structuring a novel by doing that, and have followed it with more than a dozen additional novels continuing those stories.

I was also writing web pages on a wide variety of subjects, mostly to get attention to sell the game. I wrote about Bible and law, in which I had my degrees, and time travel, which had been discussed extensively in writing the game, and several other subjects, and suddenly one day I felt that I needed to put together a book, What Does God Expect? A Gospel-based Approach to Christian Conduct, because it seemed to me that a lot of people didn’t understand the basics of Christian living. After this, my wife suggested that one of my web pages should be expanded, and that resulted in About the Fruit, and I was now writing Christian non-fiction books. Most of those came from a sort of compulsion, that this needed to be said and I was going to have to say it.

Along the way someone asked me to write a series for a new web site, Game Ideas Unlimited. The site never materialized, but Gaming Outpost grabbed the series for a redesigned site. At the same time I decided that since I had been elected Chaplain of the Christian Gamers Guild I should do something, and so I launched the Faith and Gaming series. That subsequently got published in book form, and then a publisher approached me to release an expanded edition. I was established as a writer in the role playing community.

More recently a publisher contacted me and asked if I would write a book for him, and we agreed that I would create The Essential Guide to Time Travel based on my internet writings on that subject if he would publish my at that time just finished apologetics book Why I Believe, and that established a continuing relationship which got several books back in print and introduced my New Testament analytical commentaries.

I’ve linked several of the books that are still in print. The Multiverser books should be back in print soon; we’ve created a LinkTree which will be expanded as the new material goes online. Other books both in and out of print are listed here.

That’s probably more than Jay wanted to know, but I’ve often said in my mouth all stories are long, and this was obviously going to be a long story. I hope it helps.

Books by the Author

#503: Versers Progress

August 10, 2024 M.J. Leave a comment

This is mark Joseph “young” blog entry #503, on the subject of Versers Progress.

With permission of Valdron Inc I have previously completed publishing my first ten Multiverser novels,

Verse Three, Chapter One: The First Multiverser Novel,
Old Verses New,
For Better or Verse,
Spy Verses,
Garden of Versers,
Versers Versus Versers,
Re Verse All,
In Verse Proportion,
Con Verse Lea, and
In Version, in collaboration with Eric R. Ashley,

in serialized form on the web (those links will take you to the table of contents for each book). Along with each book there was also a series of web log posts looking at the writing process, the decisions and choices that delivered the final product; those posts are indexed with the chapters in the tables of contents pages. Now as I am posting the eleventh, Con Version, again written in collaboration with Eric R. Ashley, I am again offering a set of “behind the writings” insights. This “behind the writings” look may contain spoilers because it sometimes talks about my expectations for the futures of the characters and stories–although it sometimes raises ideas that were never pursued, as being written partially concurrently with the story it sometimes discusses where I thought it was headed. You might want to read the referenced chapters before reading this look at them. Links below (the section headings) will take you to the specific individual chapters being discussed, and there are (or will soon be) links on those pages to bring you back hopefully to the same point here.

This is the fourth post for this novel, covering chapters 37 through 48. Previous mark Joseph “young” behind-the-writings web log posts for this book include:

#498: Characters Restart covering chapters 1 through 12;
#501: Characters Orienting, covering chapters 13 through 24; and
#502: Verser Setbacks, chapters 25 through 36.

There is also a section of the site, Multiverser Novel Support Pages, in which I have begun to place materials related to the novels beginning with character papers for the major characters, giving them at different stages as they move through the books. This is also the longest book to date, and has quite a few long chapters in it, so there will be quite a few of these background articles.

History of the series, including the reason it started, the origins of character names and details, and many of the ideas, are in earlier posts, and won’t be repeated here.

Quick links to discussions in this page:
Chapter 37, Cooper 12
Chapter 38, Takano 96
Chapter 39, Brown 295
Chapter 40, Cooper 13
Chapter 41, Takano 97
Chapter 42, Brown 296
Chapter 43, Cooper 14
Chapter 44, Brown 297
Chapter 45, Takano 98
Chapter 46, Brown 298
Chapter 47, Cooper 15
Chapter 48, Takano 99

Chapter 37, Cooper 12

Our conversations had a major event ahead for Wilhelm, but we agreed that there should be something less dramatic in the Cooper story before that happened, and Eric had set up the idea that he was going to climb the northeast face of North Hill, so that was the focus of this chapter. I had specifically said I wanted to write this internal dialogue thing in the middle of the climb.

After I had written the beginning through the internal dialogue, I encouraged Eric to expand the climb, which he did.

Chapter 38, Takano 96

Before we started writing this book we had discussed bringing someone to Tommy to help her survive. Our top ideas then were to bring Johnny Angel back into the story and give him a wealth of survival skills, or to create a new viewpoint character and bring him there. We chose to create Cooper; but Cooper wasn’t really turning into the survival expert we needed and was very much involved in a very interesting storyline, so we came back to whether to bring Angel here. Instead, I proposed a new indig. Discussion included whether he was big like Grizzly Adams, or tall and thin, or just an unimpressive looking guy, and what his name should be, and Davey is what emerged.

I had pictured the meeting, and so I drafted this chapter.

Chapter 39, Brown 295

As the musician, it was up to me to do a lot of the more musical end of things. I also had the advantage that I had played the Sousaphone, and also dabbled on the trumpet, and had been in a wide variety of musical combos including a Dixieland band and a marching band. I wrote this chapter.

Chapter 40, Cooper 13

Eric drafted this, covering quite a bit of the story outline. We are moving toward the famous apple story, but in our researches encountered a few other William Tell adventures worth adapting into our story.

Chapter 41, Takano 97

Eric drafted this, but we went back to make a lot of changes, partly because there were things Tommy already knew and partly because I wanted to take her out of the middle and have Davey teach the tribe directly.

Chapter 42, Brown 296

Eric drafted the beginning of this, including bringing forward the southern reaction to the “Yankee” opposition to apartheid in the south, and the initial arrival at the restaurant. We had discussed the issue of whether the owner would pay them for playing, and his solution, that Pierre would insist on it, resolved that.

Once Eric started writing about the music, he passed the baton to me to continue it. I provided music for Alphonso and created a couple of other acts, then ended with Derek’s band starting their set. However, we eventually realized we had not done enough to push the racial tensions and devil involved in politics concepts forward, so I came back and cut the chapter short, adding the introduction of the mayor and moving the rest to a new chapter to expand the Brown stories.

Chapter 43, Cooper 14

We were each waiting for the other to write this, but I realized that and drafted it. I had some concerns about how to continue that story with Cooper as the viewpoint character, but it seemed still to be unfolding well, and I sketched some ideas for it.

Chapter 44, Brown 297

Brown 296 was already long when I decided to use it to introduce the mayor, so when we were around chapter 80 I came back and split 296, expanding the second part as this chapter. This increased all the chapter numbers below this point by one, and all the Brown chapter numbers also by one.

Chapter 45, Takano 98

We needed Davey to teach survival skills to a large group of people without belaboring the story. Also, I observed that Davey lived with his family but had never met a girl who wasn’t less closely related to him than a first cousin, so this would be his opportunity to find a wife. I had suggested that Varlax and Sylwi would be candidates but problematic, but if we introduced someone else we’d also have to develop another character. Eric ran with those ideas and drafted this, with only a few minor edits from me.

Chapter 46, Brown 298

I was inclined to skip Derek’s set, but Eric said he enjoyed reading the music sections so I tackled it. I combed the book to this point and found eight songs confirmed as in their repertoire; I wanted ten, but couldn’t think of more. Peace in the Valley had been mentioned a couple times in our discussions, but it turned out to be written by Tommy Dorsey a quarter century in the future, so I put that on the back shelf. While I was writing I thought of At the Cross, the words to the verses from Isaac Watts, and although I wasn’t sure about the music I thought it was probably nineteenth century and went with it. I want to add Also Sprach Zarathustra, but want to have a session where the band learns it.

The setup with the devil at the card table was written by Eric quite a while back, originally set at the restaurant, but I objected that Hannah would not allow anyone to play cards at her restaurant, least of all the devil. We agreed to move it here, and to split it so that the meeting was a cliffhanger. The song reference is actually to one of my songs, entitled Never Alone, so it is unlikely that many readers will recognize it.

The original segment about the devil had ended with the restaurant mostly empty, and I simply copied that here; but the lead-in was very short, and it didn’t seem as if the hall would have cleared, so Eric expanded it with more music after the band, pies, and a bit more before moving to their departure and that encounter.

Chapter 47, Cooper 15

Following the rough outline, I wrote this short chapter establishing that Wilhelm had been arrested, and suggesting that Hans was bound to be caught.

Chapter 48, Takano 99

I wrote this mostly so I could continue the Brown story in the next chapter, but also because I wanted to lay the foundation for the idea that Tommy was not going to marry Davey.

This has been the fourth behind-the-writings look at Con Version. If there is interest and continued support from readers we will endeavor to continue with more behind-the-writings posts and another novel.

Books by the Author

#502: Verser Setbacks

July 21, 2024 M.J. Leave a comment

This is mark Joseph “young” blog entry #502, on the subject of Verser Setbacks.

With permission of Valdron Inc I have previously completed publishing my first ten Multiverser novels,

Verse Three, Chapter One: The First Multiverser Novel,
Old Verses New,
For Better or Verse,
Spy Verses,
Garden of Versers,
Versers Versus Versers,
Re Verse All,
In Verse Proportion,
Con Verse Lea, and
In Version, in collaboration with Eric R. Ashley,

in serialized form on the web (those links will take you to the table of contents for each book). Along with each book there was also a series of web log posts looking at the writing process, the decisions and choices that delivered the final product; those posts are indexed with the chapters in the tables of contents pages. Now as I am posting the eleventh, Con Version, again written in collaboration with Eric R. Ashley, I am again offering a set of “behind the writings” insights. This “behind the writings” look may contain spoilers because it sometimes talks about my expectations for the futures of the characters and stories–although it sometimes raises ideas that were never pursued, as being written partially concurrently with the story it sometimes discusses where I thought it was headed. You might want to read the referenced chapters before reading this look at them. Links below (the section headings) will take you to the specific individual chapters being discussed, and there are (or will soon be) links on those pages to bring you back hopefully to the same point here.

This is the third post for this novel, covering chapters 25 through 36. The previous mark Joseph “young” behind-the-writings web log posts are #498: Characters Restart and #501: Characters Orienting. There is also a section of the site, Multiverser Novel Support Pages, in which I have begun to place materials related to the novels beginning with character papers for the major characters, giving them at different stages as they move through the books. This is also the longest book to date, and has quite a few long chapters in it, so there will be quite a few of these background articles.

History of the series, including the reason it started, the origins of character names and details, and many of the ideas, are in earlier posts, and won’t be repeated here.

Quick links to discussions in this page:
Chapter 25, Takano 92
Chapter 26, Brown 290
Chapter 27, Cooper 9
Chapter 28, Takano 93
Chapter 29, Brown 291
Chapter 30, Cooper 10
Chapter 31, Brown 292
Chapter 32, Takano 94
Chapter 33, Brown 293
Chapter 34, Cooper 11
Chapter 35, Takano 95
Chapter 36, Brown 294

Chapter 25, Takano 92

This was originally about trying to find a way to catch a giant fish, but it was difficult because Eric had forgotten how they did their fishing. Faced with the complications, he changed it to needing better weapons for confrontations with wild animals. To some degree, this was because we needed to have Tommy develop more survival skills and had no source for her to learn them.

Chapter 26, Brown 290

In our discussion for this chapter I had put forward the notion that Hannah would lowball Maurice on pay, and Derek would object to a black boy being paid less than a white boy, particularly by a black employer. This actually fits into our long-term notion of a racially integrated battle against injustice.

Chapter 27, Cooper 9

I made some suggestions for the outline, including the fact that Eric wanted a miracle connected to Cooper being arrested and escaping. Making a few notes on all of that, I then wrote the arrest.

The four official languages of Switzerland are French, Italian, German, and something called Romansh. I decided that the scene would be complicated if the soldier was less fluent in German and so tried to communicate in the other three languages first.

Chapter 28, Takano 93

I had been thinking that it would be good to have someone else take over the sermons, so that we wouldn’t have to keep thinking about what Tommy was going to teach each week. Sylwi seemed a good choice.

Chapter 29, Brown 291

Our outline for Derek included that there would be a confrontation with something called a Grunch (pictured) on Halloween, and that Maurice would be there. Eric had done the research on the New Orleans monsters for three confrontations we were planning, and he wrote this.

In Brown 302 Eric made reference to Derek and Vashti having explained who they were to Maurice. At that point, I came back here and expanded a one-sentence statement to the effect that they explained who they were to him into the several paragraphs which actually did explain it.

Chapter 30, Cooper 10

There had been significant discussion of the Cooper story, and I essentially pulled together pieces of it to which we had previously agreed, anticipating the next event, which would be the first miracle of Cooper’s experience.

Chapter 31, Brown 292

I suggested that the Brown story should be accelerated here, and that the entire Halloween event should take three chapters. Eric thought it would be completed in two, but as we reached the beginning of the second it was unclear exactly how it would resolve despite having an outline.

Eric wrote this, expanding on some of the ideas he had presented previously, and taking it to a cliffhanger as I had suggested.

Chapter 32, Takano 94

I saw this as follow-up to Tommy giving Sylwi control over the weekly services. I decided on Boronir because he had been one of the Tennans and therefore a noted fighter and probably a burly guy and less social.

I wrote this while waiting for Eric to catch up the Brown story.

Chapter 33, Brown 293

Finishing the Halloween confrontation, Eric wrote most of this, but was faced with the problem of killing a monster immune to bullets. I had suggested a “spiritual weapon” which was unclear, so Eric passed the writing to me to finish, and I brought in the notion of quoting something from the sprite scriptures which disempowered the Grunch and let them kill it with their weapons.

Chapter 34, Cooper 11

Eric had suggested a miracle, and we had discussed the options, so I took to writing this chapter. I had left two Brown chapters for Eric, because he understood the monster better, but filled in the Takano and Cooper chapters between them.

Chapter 35, Takano 295

Eric had written this quite a few chapters back, but I said it was too soon, and there were a lot of little mistakes, “continuity errors”, about her situation. It wouldn’t be until later in the year that there might be food shortages, but it was a good chapter. Having reached early December in her story, Eric resurrected the chapter from the notes and made significant revisions; I had trouble with only a small part of it, which he revised.

Chapter 36, Brown 294

We had several loose futures dangling. One was that I had said the band would pick up the Sousaphone player shortly after Halloween. We had also collaboratively written a portion in which the Devil is playing poker at a dance hall Derek visits for some reason, and I had decided that it should belong to an uncle of the Sousaphone player. Eric wrote the beginning of this, with the owner of a music hall, Pascal Beaufoy, asking Derek to come play there, and then segued into the devil playing cards in the restaurant. I moved that part back to the notes, because I couldn’t imagine Hannah Johnson allowing anyone to play cards in her restaurant, least of all the devil, and it would work much better at the music hall. I then penned the section introducing Pierre Beaufoy, grand-nephew of Pascal, as a wealthy Sousaphone player who wants an opportunity to play in a band.

This has been the third behind-the-writings look at Con Version. If there is interest and continued support from readers we will endeavor to continue with more behind-the-writings posts and another novel.

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#501: Characters Orienting

June 30, 2024 M.J. Leave a comment

This is mark Joseph “young” blog entry #501, on the subject of Characters Orienting.

With permission of Valdron Inc I have previously completed publishing my first ten Multiverser novels,

Verse Three, Chapter One: The First Multiverser Novel,
Old Verses New,
For Better or Verse,
Spy Verses,
Garden of Versers,
Versers Versus Versers,
Re Verse All,
In Verse Proportion,
Con Verse Lea, and
In Version, in collaboration with Eric R. Ashley,

in serialized form on the web (those links will take you to the table of contents for each book). Along with each book there was also a series of web log posts looking at the writing process, the decisions and choices that delivered the final product; those posts are indexed with the chapters in the tables of contents pages. Now as I am posting the eleventh, Con Version, again written in collaboration with Eric R. Ashley, I am again offering a set of “behind the writings” insights. This “behind the writings” look may contain spoilers because it sometimes talks about my expectations for the futures of the characters and stories–although it sometimes raises ideas that were never pursued, as being written partially concurrently with the story it sometimes discusses where I thought it was headed. You might want to read the referenced chapters before reading this look at them. Links below (the section headings) will take you to the specific individual chapters being discussed, and there are (or will soon be) links on those pages to bring you back hopefully to the same point here.

This is the second post for this novel, covering chapters 13 through 24. The previous behind-the-writings post is mark Joseph “young” web log post #498: Characters Restart There is also a section of the site, Multiverser Novel Support Pages, in which I have begun to place materials related to the novels beginning with character papers for the major characters, giving them at different stages as they move through the books. This is also the longest book to date, and has quite a few long chapters in it, so there will be quite a few of these background articles.

History of the series, including the reason it started, the origins of character names and details, and many of the ideas, are in earlier posts, and won’t be repeated here.

Quick links to discussions in this page:
Chapter 13, Takano 88
Chapter 14, Brown 286
Chapter 15, Cooper 5
Chapter 16, Takano 89
Chapter 17, Brown 287
Chapter 18, Cooper 6
Chapter 19, Takano 90
Chapter 20, Brown 288
Chapter 21, Cooper 7
Chapter 22, Takano 91
Chapter 23, Brown 289
Chapter 24, Cooper 8

Chapter 13, Takano 288

Eric wrote this to wrap up the mountain lion story. In discussion we found that we were both a bit stymied regarding what to do with Tomiko, but he had several suggestions.

Chapter 14, Brown 286

We discussed a string of events from which we outlined about five or six chapters of Derek’s story, including hunting for food, meeting the as yet unnamed trombone player whom we had detailed some already and the owner of a local restaurant whom we had barely touched on the details. I started this chapter based on the first part of that outline. Eric took over with teaching Vashti to clean the rabbit.

We also began to discuss what time of year it was, and agreed that we wanted the climax to come at Mardi Gras but we weren’t sure how much lead time we needed before that.

Chapter 15, Cooper 5

We were struggling with having to do all the dialogue in German, which not only do neither of us speak, we don’t expect most readers to understand and we also have the difficulty that our viewpoint character doesn’t speak it well so sometimes we can’t explain what was said. I decided that there could be a reason why Hans could speak English, so I put it into the story.

Chapter 16, Takano 89

I had asked Eric whether he wanted to do anything else with the reading from the Gospel of John before we chose a next book for the weekly service, and he produced this issue of praying for a net full of fish.

Chapter 17, Brown 287

Adjusting the outline slightly, Eric had Derek and Vashti meet Hannah Johnson, who came by looking for Mister Hunter and Maurice Howland, the trombone player. She offers them fifty cents a day plus lunch to play at her restaurant at lunch time, and recommends that Maurice would be a good addition to their group.

Chapter 18, Cooper 6

Eric had designated Cooper’s first universe as “Earth One”, which I changed based on my own consideration of how that could be determined. Eric also included this note: Authors’ Note: Matterhorn was first ascended by a team led by Englishman Edward Whymper on July 14, 1865 on what Barrelmaster would call Prime Earth.

Much of this sprang from my suggestion that Cooper would insist on helping in some way, although Eric figured out what Cooper might be able to do to help.

Chapter 19, Takano 90

Eric had raised the question at the end of the previous Takano chapter, and I meditated on it overnight. It happened that I had just completed teaching (at the Christian Gamers Guild Chaplain’s Bible Study) the last chapter of the Gospel of John, so the events were fresh in my mind. I put together this as a sermon rather than as her thoughts to communicate it more effectively.

Chapter 20, Brown 288

I wrote this. I had to look up what andouille sausage was, and figure out how it went together with rice and beans, but hopefully I got it right.

Chapter 21, Cooper 7

Eric wrote this. In brief editorial discussion we agreed that on well-traveled paths and roads in the mountains Cooper would walk about four miles per hour, about thirty percent faster than average walkers. We also decided that Tell raised goats before the cheese press burned down, and still has a few from which he gets a bit of milk before breakfast, and then releases them to graze on the mountain slopes.

Chapter 22, Takano 91

We were both a bit uncertain about Tommy’s story, but I recognized it was inevitable that she would begin teaching from another book, not unreasonable for her to hit Acts, and plausible that she would find lessons from their early efforts to form a community that she could apply to their community. It still was a bit of a struggle to pull those lessons out of the text.

Chapter 23, Brown 289

We had copious notes on things that were going to happen to Derek, and just needed to get them in some kind of sequence. I wanted to write this to bring Maurice Howland into the band.

The handshake is a subtle indicator that it’s not normal in New Orleans at this time for whites to touch blacks, and that blacks are aware of the affront.

Chapter 24, Cooper 8

Working from a rough outline he had proposed, Eric put together this chapter in which Wilhelm sneaks into town to do business, and Cooper feels like there is something dishonest happening. He resolved it and sent Cooper into the neighborhood to do some sightseeing, but we had some uncertainties involving several possible directions.

This has been the second behind-the-writings look at Con Version. If there is interest and continued support from readers we will endeavor to continue with more behind-the-writings posts and another novel.

A generalist: learning less and less about more and more, one day to know nothing about everything.